「武神装甲」の返信一覧

武神装甲 (No:1)

スレ主じょうじ要望: たのもー！(ボコボコにしてください)

投稿日時： 2024年02月17日

武神装甲の批評 (No: 2)

投稿者ラプラス変換 : 1 No: 1の返信

冒頭からして読みづらい。０話から２話まで読んだけど、下手だと思った。０話の冒... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2024年02月18日

武神装甲の批評の返信 (No: 3)

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批評ありがとうございます。「睥睨」の意味を取り違えていることがわかってとても助かりました... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2024年02月18日

武神装甲の批評 (No: 4)

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こんにちは。掲載分まで読ませていただきました。率直な感想としては「説明不足でイメージしづ... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2024年02月24日

武神装甲の批評の返信 (No: 5)

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批評ありがとうございます。さっさと事件を起こしたかったので、世界観設定については後回... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2024年02月24日

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あと、冒頭がとても長いです。',
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$headerTitle = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$title = '「武神装甲」の返信一覧。ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
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Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1196
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1157
Cake\View\View::_renderElement() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1554
Cake\View\View::element() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 668
include - APP/Template/Novels/tree.ctp, line 31
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1196
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1157
Cake\View\View::render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 765
Cake\Controller\Controller::render() - CORE/src/Controller/Controller.php, line 623
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::_invoke() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 125
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::dispatch() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 93
Cake\Http\BaseApplication::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/BaseApplication.php, line 108
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\RoutingMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/RoutingMiddleware.php, line 104
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\AssetMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/AssetMiddleware.php, line 88

魔石と少年　〜平凡だった僕が英雄なれたのは、小さな石を拾ったからでした〜

投稿者 jockey 返信数 : 4

投稿日時： 2021年03月02日

現時点では、読まれた方から、文が読みやすいと言われてますが、初投稿ということもあり、全体的に不安です。あと、冒頭がとても長いです。続きを読む >>

欠点の指摘歓迎！

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「小説家に一番必要なのはコミュ力！」作家兼編集者の入江棗さん

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投稿日時： 2021年08月12日

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