「僕と君の約束」の返信一覧

僕と君の約束 (No:1)

スレ主むりんペ要望: 欠点の指摘歓迎！

投稿日時： 2024年05月26日

僕と君の約束の批評 (No: 2)

投稿者若宮　澪 : 0 No: 1の返信

えっと……、取り敢えず、「どうやって感動させるか」の前に、少し気になった表現を挙げてもよろし... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2024年05月27日

僕と君の約束の批評の返信 (No: 4)

スレ主むりんペ : 0 No: 2の返信

ありがとうございました。確かに結構話を考えるのはすごい上手だけど、文を書くの下手だねって... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2024年05月27日

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投稿者若宮　澪 : 0 No: 1の返信

ごめんなさい、まだ小学生だったのですね、ちょっと手厳しい事を言ってしまいました。読ん... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2024年05月27日

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スレ主むりんペ : 0 No: 3の返信

ありがとうございます！！汐見夏衛さんシリーズは結構読んだんですがいじめなどのシリーズが読... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2024年05月27日

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よくある王道ラブストーリーを目指しました。どうぞよろしくお願いします。
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$headerTitle = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$title = '「僕と君の約束」の返信一覧。ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$title2 = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
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include - APP/Template/Element/random_data.ctp, line 11
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1196
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1157
Cake\View\View::_renderElement() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1554
Cake\View\View::element() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 668
include - APP/Template/Novels/tree.ctp, line 31
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1196
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1157
Cake\View\View::render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 765
Cake\Controller\Controller::render() - CORE/src/Controller/Controller.php, line 623
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::_invoke() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 125
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::dispatch() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 93
Cake\Http\BaseApplication::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/BaseApplication.php, line 108
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\RoutingMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/RoutingMiddleware.php, line 104
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\AssetMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/AssetMiddleware.php, line 88

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投稿者桃うさぎ返信数 : 3

投稿日時： 2023年06月03日

久しぶりに書いたので、至らない部分が非常に多いです。ここまで長い小説を書いたのは初めてです。よくある王道ラブストーリーを目指... 続きを読む >>

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