「試作」の返信一覧

試作 (No:1)

スレ主お名前無い太郎要望: たのもー！(ボコボコにしてください)

投稿日時： 2020年02月09日

試作の批評 (No: 2)

投稿者大野知人 : 0 No: 1の返信

情報がすんなり入ってくるか、で言うと『紅い朱』（ぐろいあか）とか『電子端末』（スマホ）『空虚... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2020年02月09日

試作の批評の返信 (No: 3)

スレ主お名前無い太郎 : 0 No: 2の返信

推敲ありがとうございます！キャラを片っ端から女にしてしまう奇病にかかってるので、いっそB... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2020年02月09日

試作の批評 (No: 4)

投稿者桝多部とある : 1 No: 1の返信

読みにくいです。ここからは自分の趣味の範疇かもしれませんが。序盤、というかのっけから。チ... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2020年02月11日

試作の批評の返信 (No: 5)

スレ主お名前無い太郎 : 0 No: 4の返信

いえいえ、お気になさらないでください。そも、私が『ボコボコにしてくれ』の意思表示で作品を... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2020年02月11日

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率直な意見がほしいので、遠慮なく言ってくれると嬉しいです。
よろしくお願いします。',
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$headerTitle = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$title = '「試作」の返信一覧。ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$title2 = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$description = '「試作」の返信一覧。ネット上に投稿した小説の批評をし合うための掲示板です。小説投稿サイトに投稿したけれど感想がまったくもらえない、どこを手直ししたらもっとおもしろくなるのかわからない、自作の長所、欠点を知りたい、という方、ぜひお使いください。他人の批評依頼に書き込みをすると、あなたの最新の批評依頼がサイトの一番先頭に移動し、「おすすめ小説」の表示が付いて批評をもらいやすくなります。'
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include - APP/Template/Element/random_data.ctp, line 11
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1196
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1157
Cake\View\View::_renderElement() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1554
Cake\View\View::element() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 668
include - APP/Template/Novels/tree.ctp, line 31
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1196
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1157
Cake\View\View::render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 765
Cake\Controller\Controller::render() - CORE/src/Controller/Controller.php, line 623
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::_invoke() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 125
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::dispatch() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 93
Cake\Http\BaseApplication::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/BaseApplication.php, line 108
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\RoutingMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/RoutingMiddleware.php, line 104
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\AssetMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/AssetMiddleware.php, line 88

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武神装甲

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投稿日時： 2024年02月17日

新作の序盤がひと段落着いたので評価いただきたいです。率直な意見がほしいので、遠慮なく言ってくれると嬉しいです。よろしくお願い... 続きを読む >>

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