「ウンディーネの鍵」の返信一覧

ウンディーネの鍵 (No:1)

スレ主桃うさぎ要望: 欠点の指摘歓迎！

投稿日時： 2023年06月03日

ウンディーネの鍵の批評 (No: 2)

投稿者岸谷 : 0 No: 1の返信

いきなり独自用語は飛び出してくる所はちょっと残念でした。フレデリカ語フレデリカ人ってなんだ？... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2023年06月04日

ウンディーネの鍵の批評の返信 (No: 3)

投稿者岸谷 : 0 No: 2の返信

ご、誤字脱字が。すみません。ち外→違い。漢字→感じ、です。

投稿日時： 2023年06月04日

ウンディーネの鍵の批評 (No: 4)

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はじめまして、カイトと申します。最後まで読ませていただきました。感想としては、「... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2023年06月07日

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        <?php $i2++; ?>
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	'headerTitle' => 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！',
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	'title2' => 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！',
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	'site_name' => 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！',
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		'title' => '僕の宇宙、燃える海',
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		'url' => 'https://ncode.syosetu.com/n2704fb/',
		'created' => '2019-01-06 09:18:00',
		'comment' => '若者の混沌とした青春が描けているかどうかが不安。長所だけでなく他の部分も教えていただけたらうれしく思います。
（改善点、悪い部分など）
あ、推理小説じゃないです。

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$excellent = (int) 3
$headerTitle = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$title = '「ウンディーネの鍵」の返信一覧。ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$title2 = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$description = '「ウンディーネの鍵」の返信一覧。ネット上に投稿した小説の批評をし合うための掲示板です。小説投稿サイトに投稿したけれど感想がまったくもらえない、どこを手直ししたらもっとおもしろくなるのかわからない、自作の長所、欠点を知りたい、という方、ぜひお使いください。他人の批評依頼に書き込みをすると、あなたの最新の批評依頼がサイトの一番先頭に移動し、「おすすめ小説」の表示が付いて批評をもらいやすくなります。'
$site_name = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$meta = (int) 1
$advertisements = true
$form = (int) 1
$nondisplay = []
$h2 = '他の批評依頼'
$i2 = null
include - APP/Template/Element/random_data.ctp, line 11
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1196
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1157
Cake\View\View::_renderElement() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1554
Cake\View\View::element() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 668
include - APP/Template/Novels/tree.ctp, line 31
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1196
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1157
Cake\View\View::render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 765
Cake\Controller\Controller::render() - CORE/src/Controller/Controller.php, line 623
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::_invoke() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 125
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::dispatch() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 93
Cake\Http\BaseApplication::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/BaseApplication.php, line 108
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\RoutingMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/RoutingMiddleware.php, line 104
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\AssetMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/AssetMiddleware.php, line 88

僕の宇宙、燃える海

投稿者オレンジたろう返信数 : 2

投稿日時： 2019年01月06日

若者の混沌とした青春が描けているかどうかが不安。長所だけでなく他の部分も教えていただけたらうれしく思います。（改善点、悪い部分な... 続きを読む >>

長所を教えてください！

返信一覧最新記事

小説投稿先URL（別タブが開きます）
https://ncode.syosetu.com/n2704fb/

プロ作家に必要なのは「何としても多くの人に読んでもらいたい！」というパッション。ラノベ作家・森川秀樹さん

▼おすすめ小説！

木徳直人はミズチを殺す（完結作）

投稿者アンデッド返信数 : 11

投稿日時： 2019年06月06日

完結しましたので、改めて立てさせてもらいました。作品の大体の内容や方向性はあらすじの欄にて。新人賞で大賞を取る事を目標として... 続きを読む >>

欠点の指摘歓迎！

返信一覧人気批評最新記事

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