「誰ガ為ノ拳（だれがためのこぶし）」の返信一覧

誰ガ為ノ拳（だれがためのこぶし） (No:1)

スレ主江本雨薙要望: 欠点の指摘歓迎！

投稿日時： 2020年01月12日

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投稿日時： 2020年02月10日

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		'title' => 'ありがとう＝さようなら',
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		'comment' => 'かなり不安ですねえ
私は頭が悪いのでねぇ面白くなくてすいませんわ..。',
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$excellent = (int) 3
$headerTitle = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$title = '「誰ガ為ノ拳（だれがためのこぶし）」の返信一覧。ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$title2 = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$description = '「誰ガ為ノ拳（だれがためのこぶし）」の返信一覧。ネット上に投稿した小説の批評をし合うための掲示板です。小説投稿サイトに投稿したけれど感想がまったくもらえない、どこを手直ししたらもっとおもしろくなるのかわからない、自作の長所、欠点を知りたい、という方、ぜひお使いください。他人の批評依頼に書き込みをすると、あなたの最新の批評依頼がサイトの一番先頭に移動し、「おすすめ小説」の表示が付いて批評をもらいやすくなります。'
$site_name = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$meta = (int) 1
$advertisements = true
$form = (int) 1
$nondisplay = []
$h2 = '他の批評依頼'
$i2 = null
include - APP/Template/Element/random_data.ctp, line 11
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1196
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1157
Cake\View\View::_renderElement() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1554
Cake\View\View::element() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 668
include - APP/Template/Novels/tree.ctp, line 31
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1196
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1157
Cake\View\View::render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 765
Cake\Controller\Controller::render() - CORE/src/Controller/Controller.php, line 623
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::_invoke() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 125
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::dispatch() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 93
Cake\Http\BaseApplication::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/BaseApplication.php, line 108
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\RoutingMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/RoutingMiddleware.php, line 104
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\AssetMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/AssetMiddleware.php, line 88

ありがとう＝さようなら

投稿者まだ中学生返信数 : 1

投稿日時： 2021年09月05日

かなり不安ですねえ私は頭が悪いのでねぇ面白くなくてすいませんわ..。続きを読む >>

欠点の指摘歓迎！

小説投稿先URL（別タブが開きます）
https://ncode.syosetu.com/n4717he/

「小説家に一番必要なのはコミュ力！」作家兼編集者の入江棗さん

ヘルトリガーズ！

投稿者じゅんくん返信数 : 1

投稿日時： 2021年09月07日

毎回バトルがあります様々なジャンルを混ぜました。ハイテンポです。日本刀と拳銃続きを読む >>

たのもー！(ボコボコにしてください)

小説投稿先URL（別タブが開きます）
https://ncode.syosetu.com/n4066hd/

幼馴染と同棲して早7年。イチャイチャしている中に乱入してきたのは、どうやら我が従妹のようです。(万物《オムニア》を統べる者)

投稿者彩返信数 : 2

投稿日時： 2018年07月11日

ラブコメということで主人公とヒロインのイチャラブシーンに力を入れてみました。そこの評価をお願い致します。他に批評を貰いたい点は... 続きを読む >>

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