「ステーキ！　ステーキ！　ステーキ！」の返信一覧

小説の最重要箇所であるタイトルとプロローグを改善するための相談、意見交換ができる掲示板です。
タイトルが良くないとそもそも読者は小説を読んでくれません。
また、プロローグがおもしろくなくては、ブックマークに登録してくれません。タイトルとプロローグで小説の評価は９割決まります。
この２つを改善するための相談ができる場所です。

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		'comment' => 'ノベル道場でお世話になった、かもめしと申します。
この度、掲示板で書いていた長編小説を新人賞に応募したくて推敲しております。
今回はプロローグを書き上げてみました。
世界観の説明、キャラの会話、文章の内容など、気になる点がありましたら、どうかご指導をお願いします。

プロローグは、世界観の説明とキャラのやり取りを入れたくて書き上げました。

（あらすじ）

「それで？　殺害方法は考えついていて？」

クーヤの主人――セレス嬢には殺害したい相手がいるらしい。
らしい、という曖昧な表現なのには理由がある。それはクーヤが、殺害相手の名前もろとも過去の記憶を喪失してしまったのだ。
彼女が殺害したい相手は誰か？　
腹違いの弟か、婚約者にすり寄る女か、はたまた別の誰か、か。

「お前が思い出したらすべて教えてあげるわ。えぇ……すべて」

喪失した過去を取り戻した時、彼はもう――後戻りはできない。',
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Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1203
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1164
Cake\View\View::_renderElement() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1561
Cake\View\View::element() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 675
include - APP/Template/Novels/tree.ctp, line 30
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1203
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1164
Cake\View\View::render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 772
Cake\Controller\Controller::render() - CORE/src/Controller/Controller.php, line 623
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::_invoke() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 125
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::dispatch() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 93
Cake\Http\BaseApplication::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/BaseApplication.php, line 108
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\RoutingMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/RoutingMiddleware.php, line 104
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\AssetMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/AssetMiddleware.php, line 88

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投稿日時： 2020年07月09日

日本に名だたる大企業・「ＵＺＥ（ユーズ）」を経営する家系の三男として生まれた瑀瀬花守（うぜはなもり）は、ずっと焦がれていた幼馴染に想... 続きを読む >>

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