「青春女の自転車部（仮）」の返信一覧

青春女の自転車部（仮） (No:1)

スレ主ポゴ要望: たのもー！(ボコボコにしてください)

投稿日時： 2018年08月07日

青春女の自転車部（仮）の批評 (No: 2)

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　8話だけを一読させていただきました。オミクロンです。徹底的に酷評させていただきます。ご容赦... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2018年08月08日

青春女の自転車部（仮）の批評 (No: 3)

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　……流石にボロクソに書きすぎたので、もう少し具体的な改善点を挙げます。　まず何が足... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2018年08月08日

青春女の自転車部（仮）の批評の返信 (No: 4)

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こんばんは。たくさんの批判ありがとうございます。言われたとこだけ直して、きりのいいとこま... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2018年08月08日

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		'title' => '勇者転生Ⅰ~ある日死んだ少年の英雄譚~',
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不安な点としては文の基本構成や矛盾といったところです。',
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$excellent = (int) 3
$headerTitle = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$title = '「青春女の自転車部（仮）」の返信一覧。ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$title2 = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$description = '「青春女の自転車部（仮）」の返信一覧。ネット上に投稿した小説の批評をし合うための掲示板です。小説投稿サイトに投稿したけれど感想がまったくもらえない、どこを手直ししたらもっとおもしろくなるのかわからない、自作の長所、欠点を知りたい、という方、ぜひお使いください。他人の批評依頼に書き込みをすると、あなたの最新の批評依頼がサイトの一番先頭に移動し、「おすすめ小説」の表示が付いて批評をもらいやすくなります。'
$site_name = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$meta = (int) 1
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$form = (int) 1
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$h2 = '他の批評依頼'
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include - APP/Template/Element/random_data.ctp, line 11
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1196
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1157
Cake\View\View::_renderElement() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1554
Cake\View\View::element() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 668
include - APP/Template/Novels/tree.ctp, line 31
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1196
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1157
Cake\View\View::render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 765
Cake\Controller\Controller::render() - CORE/src/Controller/Controller.php, line 623
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::_invoke() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 125
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::dispatch() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 93
Cake\Http\BaseApplication::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/BaseApplication.php, line 108
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\RoutingMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/RoutingMiddleware.php, line 104
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\AssetMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/AssetMiddleware.php, line 88

勇者転生Ⅰ~ある日死んだ少年の英雄譚~

投稿者棘野咲希返信数 : 0

投稿日時： 2018年02月13日

出来るだけ動きの方の描写を入れようと意識して力を入れました。不安な点としては文の基本構成や矛盾といったところです。続きを読む >>

長所を教えてください！

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