「精霊戦記フルミニス」の返信一覧

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投稿日時： 2019年02月25日

精霊戦記フルミニスの批評 (No: 2)

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投稿日時： 2019年02月27日

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		'comment' => '御伽話をベースにしたコメディです。
作家でごはん！　で活動していますが、執筆に専念したいのに絡まれては相手してしまう困りものです。
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$excellent = (int) 3
$headerTitle = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$title = '「精霊戦記フルミニス」の返信一覧。ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$title2 = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$description = '「精霊戦記フルミニス」の返信一覧。ネット上に投稿した小説の批評をし合うための掲示板です。小説投稿サイトに投稿したけれど感想がまったくもらえない、どこを手直ししたらもっとおもしろくなるのかわからない、自作の長所、欠点を知りたい、という方、ぜひお使いください。他人の批評依頼に書き込みをすると、あなたの最新の批評依頼がサイトの一番先頭に移動し、「おすすめ小説」の表示が付いて批評をもらいやすくなります。'
$site_name = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$meta = (int) 1
$advertisements = true
$form = (int) 1
$nondisplay = []
$h2 = '他の批評依頼'
$i2 = null
include - APP/Template/Element/random_data.ctp, line 11
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1196
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1157
Cake\View\View::_renderElement() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1554
Cake\View\View::element() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 668
include - APP/Template/Novels/tree.ctp, line 31
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1196
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1157
Cake\View\View::render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 765
Cake\Controller\Controller::render() - CORE/src/Controller/Controller.php, line 623
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::_invoke() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 125
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::dispatch() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 93
Cake\Http\BaseApplication::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/BaseApplication.php, line 108
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\RoutingMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/RoutingMiddleware.php, line 104
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\AssetMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/AssetMiddleware.php, line 88

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投稿者ぷりも返信数 : 0

投稿日時： 2024年04月30日

御伽話をベースにしたコメディです。作家でごはん！　で活動していますが、執筆に専念したいのに絡まれては相手してしまう困りものです。続きを読む >>

たのもー！(ボコボコにしてください)

小説投稿先URL（別タブが開きます）
https://ncode.syosetu.com/n9079ix/

新人ラノベ作家が一発屋で終わる理由とは？実力不足と切られるショックの大きさ

『平凡』を求めている俺が、チート異能を使ったりツンデレお嬢様の執事になったりするのはおかしいと思うんだが。〜まぁ、学園Dランクの底辺なのが唯一の救い〜

投稿者水無月彩椰返信数 : 2

投稿日時： 2018年10月20日

主に主人公の一人称視点で書いています。今回は、それに当たっての批評をお願いしたいと思っております。(文法、文章力、描写etc....... 続きを読む >>

欠点の指摘歓迎！

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小説投稿先URL（別タブが開きます）
https://ncode.syosetu.com/n6497eq/

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投稿日時： 2018年11月12日

物理的に倒してしまう女主人公が母親を探すストーリーとなっています。主人公が世界の中心へと回っているのではなく、主人公を置いて世界が勝... 続きを読む >>

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