「夢屋」の返信一覧

夢屋 (No:1)

スレ主 MOGGA 要望: たのもー！(ボコボコにしてください)

投稿日時： 2021年07月25日

夢屋の批評 (No: 2)

投稿者大野知人 : 0 No: 1の返信

　取り合えず完結させるか、そうでなくてもキリのいいところまで作ってから持ってきてください。... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2021年07月26日

文章は良いのだが…何がしたいか見えてこない (No: 3)

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ボードゲームまで読みました。辻村深月氏のツナグを思わせるあらすじを感じましたが、実際読む... 続きを読む >>

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$headerTitle = 'ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
$title = '「夢屋」の返信一覧。ノベル道場/小説の批評をし合おう！'
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include - APP/Template/Element/random_data.ctp, line 11
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1196
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1157
Cake\View\View::_renderElement() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1554
Cake\View\View::element() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 668
include - APP/Template/Novels/tree.ctp, line 31
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1196
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1157
Cake\View\View::render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 765
Cake\Controller\Controller::render() - CORE/src/Controller/Controller.php, line 623
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::_invoke() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 125
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::dispatch() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 93
Cake\Http\BaseApplication::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/BaseApplication.php, line 108
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\RoutingMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/RoutingMiddleware.php, line 104
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\AssetMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/AssetMiddleware.php, line 88

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可逆線上のアリア

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投稿日時： 2022年12月31日

希望や救いようがないような、理不尽な話を意識して書きました。文章を断片的にしか読み直していないため、わかりにくい表現、構成や誤字脱字... 続きを読む >>

欠点の指摘歓迎！

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投稿日時： 2018年03月25日

こちらは去年の某賞にて1次落ちした作品です。いろいろメチャクチャな話なんですが、力試しと思い投稿いたしました。自分でもどこがいいのか... 続きを読む >>

たのもー！(ボコボコにしてください)

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https://ncode.syosetu.com/n7157eq/

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投稿者おのぺ返信数 : 0

投稿日時： 2018年02月13日

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