「凍った瞳改稿版1」の返信一覧

凍った瞳改稿版1 (No:1)

スレ主 silica

投稿日時： 2021年11月24日

凍った瞳改稿版1の返信 (No: 2)

投稿者日暮れ : 0 No: 1の返信

私あんまり掲示板には顔を出さないんですけど、なんとなくふらっと寄ってみました。ちなみに、... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2021年11月25日

凍った瞳改稿版1の返信 (No: 3)

投稿者カイト : 0 No: 1の返信

silicaさんこんにちは。カイトです。今回も読ませていただきました。登場人物や状況... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2021年11月25日

凍った瞳改稿版1の返信 (No: 4)

スレ主 silica : 0 No: 1の返信

日暮れさん、カイトさん、返信ありがとうございます。たしかに、夜が明けた時点でシーンは終わ... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2021年11月29日

凍った瞳改稿版1の返信 (No: 5)

投稿者柊木なお : 1 No: 1の返信

silica様執筆お疲れ様です。プロローグを読ませていただきました。短い... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2021年12月06日

凍った瞳改稿版1の返信 (No: 6)

スレ主 silica : 0 No: 1の返信

柊木なお様、返信ありがとうございます。〉短い中に世界観とキャラクターの紹介がうまく収... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2021年12月07日

凍った瞳改稿版1の返信 (No: 7)

投稿者ラ研の無惨 : 0 No: 1の返信

どうもこんにちは。先日はプロット及び相談掲示板にレスをいただきありがとうございます。プロ... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2021年12月09日

凍った瞳改稿版1の返信 (No: 8)

スレ主 silica : 0 No: 1の返信

こんにちは。ラ研の無惨様、返信ありがとうございます。たしかに、改めて読み直してみると... 続きを読む >>

投稿日時： 2021年12月10日

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小説の最重要箇所であるタイトルとプロローグを改善するための相談、意見交換ができる掲示板です。
タイトルが良くないとそもそも読者は小説を読んでくれません。
また、プロローグがおもしろくなくては、ブックマークに登録してくれません。タイトルとプロローグで小説の評価は９割決まります。
この２つを改善するための相談ができる場所です。

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Notice (8): Undefined variable: i2 [APP/Template/Element/random_data.ctp, line 11]Code Context        <?php foreach ($random_data as $novel): ?>
        <?php $i2++; ?>
        <div class="list-group-item">
$viewFile = '/home/users/2/weblike.jp-tennsaku/web/prologue/src/Template/Element/random_data.ctp'
$dataForView = [
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		'[new]' => true,
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			[maximum depth reached]
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		'[dirty]' => [[maximum depth reached]],
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		'[errors]' => [[maximum depth reached]],
		'[invalid]' => [[maximum depth reached]],
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	},
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		],
		'defaultTypes' => [
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		'novels' => [
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		'[virtual]' => [[maximum depth reached]],
		'[errors]' => [[maximum depth reached]],
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	},
	'excellent' => (int) 3,
	'headerTitle' => '小説のタイトル・プロローグ改善相談所『ノベル道場』',
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	'title2' => '小説のタイトル・プロローグ改善相談所『ノベル道場』',
	'description' => '「凍った瞳 改稿版1」の返信一覧。小説の最重要箇所であるタイトルとプロローグを改善するための相談、意見交換ができる掲示板です。タイトルが良くないとそもそも読者は小説を読んでくれません。また、プロローグがおもしろくなくては、ブックマークに登録してくれません。タイトルとプロローグで小説の評価は９割決まります。この２つを改善するための相談ができる場所です。',
	'site_name' => '小説のタイトル・プロローグ改善相談所『ノベル道場』',
	'meta' => (int) 1,
	'advertisements' => true,
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	'h2' => '他の相談依頼'
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		'comment' => 'https://www.raitonoveru.jp/counsel/novels/thread/15830で相談したもののプロローグです。
３案の人気が高いようなので３案にしました。
この出だしだけで１万字近く使ってしまいました。
こんなもので良かったのでしょうか？',
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	'people' => [
		'id' => '53',
		'name' => '和田慶彦'
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}
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$excellent = (int) 3
$headerTitle = '小説のタイトル・プロローグ改善相談所『ノベル道場』'
$title = '「凍った瞳 改稿版1」の返信一覧。小説のタイトル・プロローグ改善相談所『ノベル道場』'
$title2 = '小説のタイトル・プロローグ改善相談所『ノベル道場』'
$description = '「凍った瞳 改稿版1」の返信一覧。小説の最重要箇所であるタイトルとプロローグを改善するための相談、意見交換ができる掲示板です。タイトルが良くないとそもそも読者は小説を読んでくれません。また、プロローグがおもしろくなくては、ブックマークに登録してくれません。タイトルとプロローグで小説の評価は９割決まります。この２つを改善するための相談ができる場所です。'
$site_name = '小説のタイトル・プロローグ改善相談所『ノベル道場』'
$meta = (int) 1
$advertisements = true
$form = (int) 1
$nondisplay = []
$h2 = '他の相談依頼'
$i2 = null
include - APP/Template/Element/random_data.ctp, line 11
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1203
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1164
Cake\View\View::_renderElement() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1561
Cake\View\View::element() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 675
include - APP/Template/Novels/tree.ctp, line 30
Cake\View\View::_evaluate() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1203
Cake\View\View::_render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 1164
Cake\View\View::render() - CORE/src/View/View.php, line 772
Cake\Controller\Controller::render() - CORE/src/Controller/Controller.php, line 623
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::_invoke() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 125
Cake\Http\ActionDispatcher::dispatch() - CORE/src/Http/ActionDispatcher.php, line 93
Cake\Http\BaseApplication::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/BaseApplication.php, line 108
Cake\Http\Runner::__invoke() - CORE/src/Http/Runner.php, line 65
Cake\Routing\Middleware\RoutingMiddleware::__invoke() - CORE/src/Routing/Middleware/RoutingMiddleware.php, line 104
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