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Notice (8): Undefined variable: i2 [APP/Template/Element/random_data.ctp, line 13]もんなさんの夕焼けや鍬持つ父を眺めた日についてCode Context<p class="comment2"><?php $i2++; ?><?=$viewFile = '/home/users/2/weblike.jp-tennsaku/web/haizinn/src/Template/Element/random_data.ctp' $dataForView = [ '_serialize' => [ (int) 0 => 'haikus' ], 'haiku' => object(Cake\ORM\Entity) { '[new]' => true, '[accessible]' => [ [maximum depth reached] ], '[dirty]' => [[maximum depth reached]], '[original]' => [[maximum depth reached]], '[virtual]' => [[maximum depth reached]], '[errors]' => [[maximum depth reached]], '[invalid]' => [[maximum depth reached]], '[repository]' => 'Haikus' }, 'tree' => object(Cake\ORM\Query) { '(help)' => 'This is a Query object, to get the results execute or iterate it.', 'sql' => 'SELECT haikus.id AS "haikus__id", haikus.haiku AS "haikus__haiku", haikus.title AS "haikus__title", haikus.comment AS "haikus__comment", haikus.parent_no AS "haikus__parent_no", haikus.score AS "haikus__score", haikus.created 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投稿者 伊勢史朗 回答数 : 0
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もんなさんへ。
どうもこんばんわ。俳句添削道場の「受け売りの受け売り」や「批判の為の批判」には距離を置きたくこちらに講評いたします... 続きを読む >>